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He say, "No, don't leave me!"
She says, "I have to,
I'll be on the next side,
Goodbye. I love you."

He takes off running,
"You can't leave me now,"
So familiar, the shortcut
That leads to her house.

A shot is heard
Windows splattered with red
He looks in with hope,
But she's already dead.

Shrouded in despair
He looks at The One,
Acting with love and with aguish,
He picks up the gun.
I found this in my room and went "What da haaale??!" I guess I was depressed for a while there. Not too bad of a poem, though, I'd say. ^^
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CartoonBoyfriends Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It is really good ... Depressing poems always seem better written, because they make more of an impact
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brnin8or Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's so true though... And thanks~ ^^
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Jacketgirl Jun 28, 2012  Student General Artist
It's an amazing poem. Reminds me of a story I wrote once.
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brnin8or Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh can read plz?
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Jacketgirl Jun 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Yeah, I'll have to show it too you sometime.
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brnin8or Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! ^^
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